Craptacular poetry

[vtran31]

in case something happens to me. I tohught i would share some poetry I made up. No one has had the guts to tell me it reeks. so eitehr everyone is just too "nice" to tell me the truth, most likely, or they are actually decent

Born again experience
By: Vincent Tran

I can’t explain it,
This feeling inside of me.
Sin used to take every hit
To destroy what I could be.
But when He saved my life.
He destroyed it all for me.
The desire to ruin my life
Is completely gone from me.
I have been born from above
Thanks to Him giving His life for me.
Now as peaceful as a dove,
I yearn to know Him fully.

I can’t explain it
This freedom inside of me
Christ has redeemed every bit
Of my mind, soul, and body
Now that He has paid the price
I can approach Him fully
With His blood He purchased my life
With the cross, He destroyed the enmity
Now that He has shown His love
By laying down His life for me
I can stand far above
Anything the world will throw at me

I can’t explain it
This fire inside of me
Now that He has filled me with His Spirit
I must testify of what He has done for me
He has given me the water of eternal life
That satisfies every part of me.
He has destroyed that strife
That used to cause such misery.
Now that He has embraced me with His love
I can show the world this mystery
That Christ descended from above
To die for you and me.

[vtran31]

that last song is not even true of me anymore . well here is another one that is almost done but incomplete nonetheless. I want a fair assessment. no sugar coating please
Come into the light.
Accept Jesus Christ
As your Lord and Savior.
Oh, won’t you come with me
And follow me and see
The new earth and heaven?
Oh, won’t you accept eternal life?
You have to pay one single price,
Giving your life to Jesus.
He will cleanse your soul.
He will fill that hole
With the love He gives you.

Oh, won’t you accept eternal life
And put an end to that miserous strife
And accept the gift from heaven?
Oh, won’t you come with me
And see what Christ did at Calvary.
Where He died for sinners.
Come into the light.
Don’t let darkness rule another night.
Let God save you.
He will fill your every need.
With the Word of God He will plant a seed
That will grow into a tree that reaches the heavens.

Oh, won’t you come with me
To where I died to the world and the world to me
And see how God frees you
Come into the light
Let God’s love guide you day and night
And accept the freedom in Jesus.
Oh, won’t you accept eternal life?

[Heavensdaughter]

I think that your poems are wonderful, and quite unique- at least in the poetry I have read, I haven't seen anything quite like this and I think it's great, keep writing!
Melissa

[vtran31]

how is it unique?

[Heavensdaughter]

It is unique to me in that I do not come across alot of Christian Poetry being written today.

[Citizen]

vtran, I just saw this ... I had no idea! Are these songs you've written? Or poems? Or a mix?

They're very good, vtran ... you put a lot of heart-felt emotion into them, not just cute little lines that go together.

You should keep at it!

[HITR]

Citizen said:

vtran, I just saw this ... I had no idea! Are these songs you've written? Or poems? Or a mix?

They're very good, vtran ... you put a lot of heart-felt emotion into them, not just cute little lines that go together.

You should keep at it!

Yes, I agree with what Citizen said here. It is very heartfelt, and I would also encourage that you continue to write whenever the urge comes to you.

In Christ, HITR